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The Raven with Broken Wings

15 Sep

Her swan floated in the air, dancing slowly as it faded. And as it finally disappeared, she tried again, trying to gather the happy memories she had with him. But as she whispered, “Expecto Patronum” nothing happened.

She finally placed her wand down on the bathroom floor. The bathroom had been her hideout for the past few days. It was where she could be alone. It was where she didn’t have to face everyone and their attempts to make her feel better.

As she stared at an empty wall, imagination was magic itself. On the plain brown wall, she imagined how it would be like to still have him around. She could see his smile, and how he naughtily narrowed his eyebrows at her. She could feel his touch as he kissed the top of her hand. She could hear his voice as he whispered sweet things into her ears. These were all memories, memories that made the tears fall once again.

She missed him so much. She missed talking to him, and telling him how the day’s classes had been. She missed practicing Quidditch with him, and how he would always let her win even though he constantly denied doing so. She wished he was here right now, holding her hand and telling her that everything that had happened was just a horrible nightmare. If only he could tell her he was never leaving her.

Gripping on to the raven pendant he had given her on her birthday, she recalled the day he sneaked her out of her common room to the astrology tower.

“Where are we going?” she asked softly as they ran down the empty hallway after hours.

“You’ll see.” He smiled.

“We’re breaking the rules! And you’re a prefect, if we get caught-“

“I’ll make sure we WONT get caught.” He playfully grinned as he led her up a flight of steps.

At the top of the astrology tower, he had already magically conjured pillows, blankets, and everything she considered soft, in shades of light blue, her favorite color. As he slumped into them laughing, he patted for her to take a seat next to him.

“Is this allowed?” she asked worriedly.

“I don’t think so, but i don’t really care, do you?” He gave another boyish grin.

After a few seconds of hesitation, she finally took a seat next to him. And a few minutes later, she could hear the school clock chime loudly. She had almost forgotten what the day was until he reminded her.

“Happy birthday beautiful,” he said as he pulled out a small box.

“You remembered?” She was rather surprised. They hadn’t been dating for long, but that moment felt as though they had been.

“I always did,'” he said while he slowly opened the box and took out a raven pendant.

Gently placing it on her palm he swished his wand, and silver chain hooked itself onto it.

“Do you want me to put it on for you?”

Still staring at the pendant, she smiled and nodded.

And just as he did, she turned and wrapped her arms around him.

“Thank you,” she whispered into his ear.

“Anything for your beautiful eyes,”

“Just my eyes?” She pulled away, playfully pretending to be offended.

“The eyes are the windows into the soul, no?”

She shook her head as she blushed. He was a smart one.

That night with him was a memory she would never forget. It felt just like last night, but she knew she was here alone last night, and the night before. Because he was gone.

Never again will he cheekily wink at her in the great hall. Never again will she see a future with him. All she had was memories of what they had, and dreams of what they could have. It wasn’t just his absence that made things so hard, it was the fact that kept ringing in her heart that he was dead.

More tears fell as her heart broke further. She couldn’t be fixed. She was like a bird with broken wings. He was the one that helped her fly. He inspired her to be the best. He had never given up on her. Without him, how could she brave the skies?

“Please come back,” she sobbed.

Pease help me fly again Ced, Cho thought as she pulled her knees to her body and wept.

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Posted by on September 15, 2011 in Fan Fiction (Shorts)

 

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23 responses to “The Raven with Broken Wings

  1. On life and stuff

    September 15, 2011 at 10:28 pm

    This was beautiful. One detail: it’s the Astronomy Tower, not Astrology.

     
    • Jeyna Grace

      September 21, 2011 at 7:43 pm

      I just checked. There is both an astronomy and astrology tower in Hogwarts. The astrology tower is where students go to study. Its the smallest tower in hogwarts, if not mistaken. Astronomy tower is the biggest.

       
  2. emotedllama

    September 15, 2011 at 11:29 pm

    …Man. The timing in the writing here is just perfect; I can’t find a fault. Really, really, great piece of writing!

     
    • Jeyna Grace

      September 16, 2011 at 6:24 am

      Thank you 🙂 Its good to know i’m having less mistakes in my writing!

       
  3. paintmeantagonist

    September 19, 2011 at 2:35 am

    Oh Cho. I always really felt for her. This is a really lovely but sad story. I like the image of a bird with broken wings, especially since it’s Cho.

    I didn’t see many mistakes but one thing I got caught up on is a missing word around the end. You wrote “the fact that kept ringing” in the fourth to last paragraph. It was supposed to be “it,” right? Between the “kept” and the “ringing?”

    Still, I really liked this. I haven’t read many Cho stories but I might have to start (or write my own) now!

     
    • Jeyna Grace

      September 19, 2011 at 10:35 am

      Thanks! Oh, no, if I put an It, it would be a different meaning all together. I was meaning to say that the “fact” kept ringing. Do write one and let me know!

       
  4. Pik

    September 21, 2011 at 7:29 pm

    I like this story very much, in my opinion you found the right tone for the characters. They’re somehow more like in the books than in some of your other little fanfictions (I still haven’t read all of them). Keep it up! (:

     
    • Jeyna Grace

      September 21, 2011 at 7:36 pm

      Thanks! Well, I do hope to be able to write as close to the characters as possible some day. Let me know what you think of the rest!

       
  5. Medha

    September 28, 2011 at 6:05 pm

    Wow! This is amazing, right from the very first line. It starts off beautifully, ends beautifully and it kept me guessing the identities of the two characters till the very end! Lovely! 🙂

     
    • Jeyna Grace

      September 28, 2011 at 8:01 pm

      That was my goal, the guessing game. It was kinda hard to write to, trying not to let out the characters slip out. I hope to write more like this one sometime, if I have more brain juice to squeeze. Haha!

       
      • Medha

        September 28, 2011 at 10:16 pm

        Haha! I hope you do get inspiration and ideas to write more stuff like this. I’m sort of envious of you that ways, because I hardly get the time to write. Forget writing, I don’t even have the time to update my blog, even though my pictures and all are ready. 😦 I wish I had two simultaneous lives!

        By the way, I started a new blog, just for all my writings. It’s fairly new but I’d like you to check it out and leave some feedback, if you can… http://gmedha.blogspot.com

         
        • Jeyna Grace

          September 28, 2011 at 10:49 pm

          Sure, I’ll check it out soon 🙂

           
          • Medha

            September 28, 2011 at 10:51 pm

            Great…thanks! 🙂

             
  6. Kiara Paramita Octaviani

    November 6, 2011 at 11:13 pm

    aw geez.. it bring tears to my eyes! beautiful!

     
  7. haylzie

    April 18, 2013 at 9:57 am

    This was probably one of my favorite of these Harry Potter stories of yours that I’ve read so far! It was beautiful and I never even suspected that Cho was the main character! You have a definite God-given talent, Jeyna!

     
    • Jeyna Grace

      April 18, 2013 at 10:08 am

      You’re really on a reading marathon eh? Haha! Thanks so much! That’s really encouraging 😀

       
      • haylzie

        April 19, 2013 at 7:24 am

        Yeah, I try to get in about 2-4 stories each day becuase that’s all I have time for! Well, I technically don’t even really have enough time for those, but I think homework can come second to your captivating stories!

         
        • Jeyna Grace

          April 19, 2013 at 10:03 am

          Haha! I feel honoured 🙂 Thanks for all the comments!

           
  8. vlackerine

    May 30, 2013 at 6:36 pm

    Whenever I feel like doing nothing I come here to have some sense in me to do something…your works are inspirations! Really!
    Great writing! 🙂

     
    • Jeyna Grace

      May 30, 2013 at 6:39 pm

      Wow, I didn’t know I could motivate! Thank you 🙂

       
  9. yawriterinthemaking

    August 7, 2013 at 9:39 am

    This was beautiful! This was also the first Harry Potter fan fic I’ve read in a long time! Glad I decided to give yours a chance 🙂

     
    • Jeyna Grace

      August 7, 2013 at 10:05 am

      Thank you! I’m glad you did 🙂

       

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