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Chapter 4:

08 Sep

Joanna pointed her wand at Tom, “Expelliarmus!”

It caught Tom by surprise as his wand flew out of his hand. Disarmed, Joanna walked towards him as Tom backed up, reaching for his wand.

“Let me see it and I won’t hurt you,” Joanna calmly said as Tom picked his wand up.

“Funny, I was about to say the same thing.” Tom smirked.

“Oh? Let’s see you try.” Joanna wasn’t sure what she had asked for, but her adrenaline was rushing and it was the excitement she didn’t have for quite some time now.

“I would, but I don’t think you’re a match at all. It’ll be rather mean to pick on a weaker student, wouldn’t it?”

Joanna chuckled. “You sound like Malfoy right there.”

“The only difference is that I’m not Malfoy. And you don’t know what I’m capable of.”

“And YOU don’t know what I’m capable of,” Joanna replied. She felt as though she was talking to herself, who was typically the only one who actually stood up to her.

“Well then, let’s see. Ladies first,” Tom said with a bow.

Joanna thought briefly about waking up the Professors, but she immediately brushed the thought aside. She wasn’t going to give up the chance to prove this boy wrong.

“Incarcerous!” A bright yellow light escaped Joanna’s wand and the moment it hit Tom, ropes twisted around his body.

“Incendio!” Tom quickly said and the ropes were set on fire just before they could tighten around him. Within seconds, they disintegrated, with its ashes collecting on the ground in a circle around him.

“My turn. Impedimenta!” Tom waved his wand at her.

Joanna saw the green spark flying and quickly muttered, “Protego.”

Tom didn’t wait as he threw another spell. “Stupefy!”

“Protego.” Joanna defended again. He gave her no chance for an offense.

“Petrifucus Totalus!”

“Protego!”

“Expulso!”

Joanna dodge the last spell as it hit a nearby door, shattering it into a million pieces and sending splinters everywhere.

“Did you just try to blow me up?!” Joanna yelled.

Just before she could throw a spell at him, she heard footsteps. And when their eyes met in the brief moment of panic, he waved for her to follow him.

They ran down a hallway and entered the first door they saw. It was a small, cramped up store room.

“Great,” Joanna muttered under her breath. She was about to say something else when Tom placed his hand over her mouth.

His perfect timing saved them from being caught as the sound of footsteps were accompanied by shadows, passed by the store room.

But after the shadows were gone and the sound of footsteps died off, Joanna blurted out, “You tried to blow me up!”

“Yes, I was pretty aware of that.”

“You’re crazy!” Joanna kicked his sheen and Tom yelped.

“I could have died!” Joanna continued.

“You look very much alive to me.” Tom shrugged as he exited the store room.

“What were you thinking?” Joanna followed after him, lowering her voice.

“I was thinking of blowing you up,” Tom answered bluntly and started walking.

Joanna, unsatisfied with his answers, followed after him. And when she gave his arm a sudden tug, the book fell onto the floor. Fortunately, she reached for it before he did.

“Bloody hell,” Tom muttered.

“Goodnight,” Joanna said as she quickly walked in the opposite direction.

“Wait, we can read it together,” Tom called out to her softly.

“I’ll read it alone,” Joanna said and tried her very best to disapparate correctly this time.

It must have somehow worked as she landed on her back in the Hufflepuff common room. She quickly got up and checked if she had any missing limbs, and to her surprise, she was still intact.

The common room was quiet and empty. Everyone was pretty much asleep and Joanna saw no harm in reading the book right there and then. With that, she settled down on a couch by the fire place and started reading.

She had finished the book pretty quickly and had a full hour of sleep before she had to clean up and head to the great hall for breakfast.

That morning, Joanna tucked the book under her cloak and followed Annoria to the great hall. Annoria, who kept hassling for a reason why Joanna wasn’t in bed last night, kept a suspicious expression throughout breakfast. But that didn’t bother Joanna much.

Breakfast ended with Tom no where in sight. Joanna was half glad she didn’t see him, but he was only missing at breakfast because during Charms, he turned up and sat right next to her.

“Where’s the book?” Tom whispered.

“It’s with me,” Joanna replied, eyes still fixed on the Professor in front.

“Give it.”

“If you don’t mind me asking, why do you want to make a Horcrux?” Joanna boldly asked.

“It’s none of your business.”

“It’s very dangerous. People die trying you know.”

“I don’t really care. Now please give it,” Tom said, sounding a bit annoyed.

“My uncle died trying,” Joanna said as she leaned forward, looking attentive to the lecture.

“Your family… are into the dark arts?” There was a hint of interest in Tom’s voice.

“My mother’s side of the family, but most of them are dead anyways,” Joanna casually answered, as though it was no big deal.

“Well then, if you could be so kind to hand me the book, I would greatly appreciate it.”

Joanna hesitated. Her aunts and uncles were mostly dead or about to die. The dark arts messed them up pretty good and Joanna wasn’t sure if she should give Tom the book. He could die. And it wasn’t magic a 16 year old should be playing around with.

To be continued…

(Leave a comment below or vote on whether Joanna should give the book to Tom, or attempt to destroy it!)

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25 Comments

Posted by on September 8, 2011 in Fan Fiction (Novel)

 

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25 responses to “Chapter 4:

  1. emotedllama

    September 8, 2011 at 11:14 pm

    Hee, I just got an email for this. Really enjoyable chapter; the only criticism I have is that Joanna is veering down the Mary Sue road, and there are a few grammatical errors. Actually, a third thing; isn’t it impossible to apparate in Hogwarts?

     
    • Jeyna Grace

      September 8, 2011 at 11:35 pm

      She seems kinda perfect doesnt she? Hmm… i’ll give her some flaws later on.
      Grammatical errors? I was rereading and i knew some things weren’t quite right, could you point it out?
      I THINK one can apparate in the school, but not in an out. I read it somewhere on hp wikia.

       
      • emotedllama

        September 8, 2011 at 11:38 pm

        “Let me see it and I wont hurt,” Joanna calmly said as Tom picked his wand up.”
        There’s a missing apostrophe in “wont”.
        “Tom didnt wait as he threw another spell. “Stupefy!””
        Again, missing apostrophes.

        I would say most of the issues do seem to be with missing apostrophes in contractions and possessives, and you sometimes forget to capitalize single Is. That’s about it, though.

        Sorry if that sounded harsh or overly analytical. I’m bad at putting things nicely.

         
        • Jeyna Grace

          September 8, 2011 at 11:48 pm

          I have not been paying attention to those minor grammar stuff. Cause i’m not really publishing these for sale. Uncaps “I’s” and missing apostrophes are things i tend to overlook. But i think i should start now as i’ve been getting a few comments on these minor grammar stuff. Thanks for pointing them out.

          But for “Stupefy!” why do i need another apostrophe?

          Nah, no worries. It is a good thing that people point these things out, or not i would still be complacent.

           
          • emotedllama

            September 9, 2011 at 12:46 am

            Naw, you were missing an apostrophe in “didnt”.

            Yeah, I suspected as such–just do what pleases you, as it’s really not that important.

             
  2. The Good Greatsby

    September 9, 2011 at 12:16 am

    This is fun. I always wanted to write my own Hogwarts story.

     
    • Jeyna Grace

      September 9, 2011 at 12:27 am

      Oh, do write one! And let me know! I would love to read it 🙂

       
  3. yuehann

    September 9, 2011 at 10:46 am

    Keep it up Jeyna! BTW, minor thing.. shouldn’t it be “intact” rather than “in tack”? 🙂

     
  4. Far from normal:3

    September 12, 2011 at 3:37 am

    Great job! I have read most of your stories and you are quite talented! Keep up the great work!

    And thanks for visiting my blog!

     
    • Jeyna Grace

      September 12, 2011 at 8:17 am

      Thanks! And thank you for visiting too 🙂

       
      • Far from normal:3

        September 13, 2011 at 7:28 am

        No problem. And after reading a few of your posts you inspired me to write a Percy Jackson fanfiction. It will now where be as fantastic as your stories but hey I have a start right(:?

        Sincerely, “Augustina:3”

         
        • Jeyna Grace

          September 13, 2011 at 9:55 am

          I’m glad I inspired you! Haha, who knows? Maybe yours would be better! So start!

           
  5. Jesus

    September 12, 2011 at 3:54 am

    I’m liking your blog. 🙂 Thanks for commenting on my post. It’s always cool getting new people to the site.

     
    • Jeyna Grace

      September 12, 2011 at 8:18 am

      Thank you! No prob! Vice versa 🙂

       
  6. Chris

    September 14, 2011 at 10:31 pm

    I like to think of this as excellent fan fiction!

     
    • Jeyna Grace

      September 14, 2011 at 10:32 pm

      Thanks Chris! I’m really glad you think so 🙂

       
  7. merrynipp

    September 15, 2011 at 1:32 am

    Hey !! Thx for visiting =D ! I must admit I didn’t read everything either haha. But as you can go back on each chapter I’ll read little by little while I progress on the story ^^

     
    • Jeyna Grace

      September 15, 2011 at 9:00 am

      Yea, that’s what I did. But my main goal was to find the things i have not found yet! haha!

       
  8. elenaalex23

    November 6, 2011 at 12:00 am

    Just a quick tip: Be careful of grammatical errors. There are a few here and there. Also, isn’t it impossible to apparate/disapparate within the Hogwarts grounds? O.o
    But on the whole, I enjoyed it. (:

     
    • Jeyna Grace

      November 6, 2011 at 12:06 am

      Yea, I’ve been told. And I can assure you the latest posts are as grammatical error free as it could be.
      Isnt it in and out, not in and in? LOL.. No idea.

       
  9. Daniel

    July 4, 2012 at 1:12 pm

    My only complaint is that the chapters are too short, I’d love to read more in one sitting (at least I haven’t had to wait between each chapter!). I didn’t think you could apparate at all in Hogwarts, unless you were Dumbledore/Headmaster, but it’s fanfiction, and you can have it anyway you want. Maybe Professor Dippet didn’t mind about apparating around the school? Good work!

     
    • Jeyna Grace

      July 4, 2012 at 2:03 pm

      Yup, you don’t have to wait! But catching up gives you the opportunity to vote and help direct the story 🙂

       
  10. otakulinn

    September 22, 2013 at 11:50 am

    I’m sorry to bother you, but I’m new to wordpress, and I was just wondering whether you could help me with how to add a favicon onto my blog site.
    I’ve looked online for answers, however I couldn’t find one since the layout of wordpress has changed so much.

     
    • Jeyna Grace

      September 22, 2013 at 6:41 pm

      Hi! No problem. I don’t use any favicons.
      All the clickable images I have are all designed by me then uploaded and attached with a link.

       

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